主要是时态问题。按这个故事来说整体挪到过去时比较容易把握。另外就是不要总是And。
其它有单三之类的小毛病。我按过去时重写了一遍。
Lily and Linda were good friends. They were classmates,too.
One day, Miss Chin the teacher wanted them to write down their dreams. Lily wanted to be a scientist and Linda wanted to be a doctor.
After 20 years, they grew up. Lily became a scientist and Linda became a doctor. They hadn't met each other any longer. Then, however, at a supermarket, they met each other. They recognized their friends and were very happy. At that time, they thought their jobs were so difficult. They wanted to be a teacher instead of being a scientist or a doctor. So they went to the school they had learnt things before and asked if they could be a teacher there. Mr.George the teacher asked them some questions and they became the teacher there. In the end, they were very happy because they could be together again.
【 在 walalala 的大作中提到: 】
<p><p>&lt;p&gt;最近开始让娃写小作文，大家帮我看看还有哪些需要调整的点，语法时态我能懂一点，但是可能也不是太懂，我理解一开始应该用</p><p></p>
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